My Roommate

It was my first day at the university.Carrying bags of luggage, I walked slowly into the dormitory building.I looked door after door for my name.At last I found it.In the room, there was already a girl making her bed.

Smiling shyly, she greeted me with“how do you do”. Then, she continued her work, paying no more attention to me.“What a stuck-up fellow”, I thought.Then I began to examine the room.It was no different from any other room I had seen. But it had been thoroughly cleaned by my new roommate, no doubt.

Minutes later, I started to examine her.She was thin, short and dark.Her hair was in a completely disastrous mess like a bunch of straw.Her dirty clothes and tired look were clearly signs of a long journey.Well, her T-shirt was too big for her and her trousers were a bit short, which made her look funny. Furthermore, she wore a pair of rubber scandals, which were indeed out of fashion.In a word, she did not look like a smart freshman at all.“A yokel”, I concluded.

The second time she spoke, her accent told me that she was from the south.“Shall I help you to get your luggage from the ground floor? ”I did not refuse since I really needed help.Wow!She was quick in action.Before I said“Thanks”, she had already walked out of the room and was soon far ahead of me.

“A good guy, ”I said to myself, “I will make friends with her.”I hurried and caught up with her.

简评

本文作者通过细致的观察和生动的语言，使一个淳朴少女的形象跃然纸上。作者叙述了上大学的第一天对室友的第一印象。有外表的描写：黝黑瘦弱矮小、头发像一团乱草堆、穿着不合身的衣裤和过时的凉鞋。由此，作者得出的结论是她是个“乡巴佬”。有语言的描写：“how do you do”，“Shall I help you to get your luggage from the ground floor? ”，虽然言语不多，但读者能感受到这是一个热心善良的女孩。还有行动的描写：整理完自己的床铺后，帮作者搬行李，表现出她勤劳淳朴的一面。因此，作者最终产生了要和她交朋友的想法。本文字数不多，情节简单，但作者成功地塑造了室友的形象：身材矮小，但有着高大的形象；衣着过时，但有一颗美丽的心灵，与作者相成了强烈的对比。作者对语言的运用自如，有扎实的语言功底。文章读来没有晦涩生硬之感。

（点评教师：黄莺）

姓名：周骏

学号：0240022